Group 48 feedback on roughcut

This s a good rough cut. Obviously as you have said you need more footage, it could be good if you got some other shots in that space that are other than point of view, like some closeups or med shots of the girl in her house. Maybe some high angled ones to show how low she feels at the beginning. Also maybe if you could fit in the artist from somewhere? As we think you need to promote the artist a little more, and although the video idea is great you might not meet the marking criteria fully.
Hope that helped.